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All Things Will Come by Dark_Author Rated: Provocative starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 38]

Summary:

Will Inuyasha and Kagome reveal their feelings?  Will Everyone surive their final battle? Life and death, love and hate, romance, sadness, drama, excitement...it's all here, in this alternate ending to the Inuyasha manga. 

Note: This was originally posted by me, Dark_Author, on the site inuyasha-fanfiction.com

This takes place after the end of the manga…sort of. The thing is, I didn’t much care for the end of the manga. It wasn’t he ending I had hoped it would be. So, as I writer and an Inuyasha fan, I have decided to take matters into my own hands. This is my own alternate ending. It begins immediately after Naraku is defeated.  

The actual ending of the manga wasn't what I thought it should be.  It was lacking in emotion, completeness, and too many words were left unsaid.  Not to mention too many things left undone.  This alternative ending hopes to do for me, and others, what the original did not.


Categories: Legends
Characters: InuYasha, Kagome, Miroku, Other, Rin, Sango, Sesshomaru, Shippou
Genres: Action-Adventure, Angst, Drama, Fantasy, Horror, Psychological, Romance, Tragedy
Warnings: Explicit Sex
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 26349 Read Count: 4739

[Report This] Published: August 02, 2008 Updated: November 28, 2008


Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chapter 1: Too Late, Too Soon

Ouch…I thought that I was brutal to Inu so far, but I got nothing on this. The descriptions of his injuries leave me cringing. I like it though and you defiantly caught my interest.



Author's Response: I'm glad!  Thanks for reading, and reviewing!





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 2
Title: Chapter 2: Fall

 

Spelling thingy.

 

"Why is HE coughing blood, Kaede?"

 

*tear*. ....you killed him off???? *grumble grumble* I guess I can't complain...I am killing of one of my characters too...



Author's Response: Thanks!  I'll fix the error ASAP.  I always miss stuff like that...so thanks!  And thanks for reading!





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 3
Title: Chapter 3: A Second Of Eternity

 

"I've never HAD it before," said Kagome.

 

 

YOU KILL HIM AND THEN YOU STEAL HIS BODY????



Author's Response:

Thanks again for the correction.  I'll be fixing t hat, too.  And I know, stealing his body right after I kill him is pretty mean...I'm sorry.  But it had to happen...

Thanks again for reading and reviewing!





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 4
Title: Chapter 4: The Beginning

 

Ok...so you kill him off...bring him back, kill him off...bring him back, and now he says that Kagome did it. did I miss anything?



Author's Response:

Nope.  Thats about right.  I'm just mean like that.  lol.  Hope you like it, though.

Thanks for the read and reviews!





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 5
Title: Chapter 5: Memory

 

Sango threw her hiraikotsu , and KAgome yelled

 

Aw...poor Inuyasha and poor Kagome...



Author's Response: Thanks.  I have quite a few little errors to fix, it seems.  Oh well.  Thats the only way to improve! lol.   Thanks for reading and reviewing and I'm glad you like it!





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 6
Title: Chapter 6: Forgotten

 

They've all been worried sick about you, and I haven't been very good about them visit. (Letting them visit, or them visiting. I like the first one more...)

 

 

OnCe Inuyasha pulled himself up enough,

 

I can't help but wonder when this is all gonna back fire on him.



Author's Response:

It fires back on him pretty harsh.  Sorry about some of the odd errors.  Like forgetting letters in 'once' my keyboard was dying and I didn't notice it enough to replace the batteries until a few chapters later.

Thanks for reading!





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 7
Title: Chapter 7: Perspective

 

It felt like someone had taken all his injuries and stabbed them WITH toothpicks.

 

blink blink. I did not see that comeing...no pun inteded



Author's Response:

lol.  I felt really awkward leaving that scene in there, but really I think it helps it helps the chapter.  I've never written a sex scene before this.

Thank you, once again, for reading and reviewing.  And for pointing out the little errors!  I need to fix 'em...





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 8
Title: Chapter 8: The Awkwardness Of Impulse

 

aw...that last part was sweet...

 



Author's Response: Yeah, well...  I they had to have a few more sweet moments.. It gets kinda...err...'tragic'...later on.





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 9
Title: Chapter 9: Plans & Honesty

 

He liked it in the future...Kagome's (apostrophe)

 

Yes....what have you made Inuyasha do...



Author's Response:

He panicked and wasn't using his head. 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 10
Title: Chapter 10: Wish

poor poor poor Inuyasha.

Author's Response:

I felt bad writing that chapter.  I hate being mean to him...but the story called for it.

Thanks again!





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 11
Title: Chapter 11: Desperation

 

Kagome cried herself TO sleep.

 

Dragging in the older brother, eh? Well, I hope that he can help.

Author's Response:

Can and will are too different things....  Thanks again!  I appreciate your time reading and reviewing!





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 12
Title: Chapter 12: Void

 

Duh duh duh! An interesting turn of events. Sesshomaru knew that he was being followed and finally showed himself....very interesting...

 



Author's Response: Sesshomaru is a challenging character...   I'm glad you seem to be enjoying this!





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 13
Title: Chapter 13: Rivals

 

Only the great lord Sesshomaru would be swayed by a child. I am glad that he was though.



Author's Response: Rin does kind of seem to e his weakness.  And, Sesshomaru was a challenge to write.  I had things I needed him to do that were a bit out of character, and I needed a way to make him do them.  In this case, Rin seemed to be the logical choice.





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 14
Title: Chapter 14: Brothers

 

That was rather gory and I suppose, and a little too detailed.



Author's Response:

It's my first large scale battle scene, and I was attempting to draw you into it with the details...even if they ARE a bit repulsing.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 15
Title: Chapter 15: Death

 

Very angst filled.



Author's Response:

Yeah, I know.  I wasn't joking when I picked angst as a catagory...lol  Hope you like it, though!





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 06, 2008
Chapter number: 16
Title: Chapter 16: Angel Of Mercy

 

Ok...so then if the beads were gone, why did he still drop?



Author's Response:

Because he's been told to sit too much.  It just kinda happened on instinct.  It was kind of a joke.

Again, thank you!





Reviewer: lil6ter Signedstarstarstarstarstar
Date: August 07, 2008
Chapter number: 17
Title: Chapter 17: Epilogue

Awwwwww…a sweet ending. You had me doubting that there most of the time ya know. Well, I review for you :-P. I liked the story for the most part, but to be frank, I normally read things that have more fluff in it, though I would be a hypocrite if I said that it was too dark anything along those line because WR is going to get dark too. Dark like this, I do not know…but you defiantly live up to your name, no question about that. over all, I give the story a 5 (which is a 10, but they only let you go up to 5 stars...and i am still trying to figure out where they are hidden...)!



Author's Response:

You are the first person to make a connection between my screen name and my story! lol.  Anyway, I'm glad you liked the story and I appreciate all the reviews.  I'll be fixing the errors you pointed out soon.  I'm sorry that it was a bit dark, but then...that's how I write.  Even my books are pretty dark themed.  Thanks for reading though, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

P.S.  Thanks for the 10!



Of Love & War by Dark_Author Rated: Salacious starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 17]

Summary:
Hell as been opened, and 43 of the most fearsome demons who have ever lived escape...Naraku among them. After three years apart, Inuyasha and Kagome reunite to face this ultimate challenge of strength, willpower, determination...and love.

This takes place after Naraku is defeated near the end of the manga. I didn't like the ending after that point, and this story is an alternate ending.
Categories: Legends
Characters: None
Genres: Action-Adventure, Angst, Drama, Fantasy, Horror, Psychological, Romance
Warnings: Explicit Sex, Graphic Violence
Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 18766 Read Count: 841

[Report This] Published: August 13, 2008 Updated: July 07, 2009


Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: August 31, 2008
Chapter number: 2
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Lost

 

 

Sniffle sniffle...poor Kagome...she was only trying to help! And you think that I am the evil one... I like the Chapter though, so hurry up and write some more already!





Reviewer: lil6ter Signedstarstarstarstarstar
Date: June 22, 2009
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chapter 1: Part 1 Chapter 1: Murderer

Oh yes...and don't forget...I still have my pitch fork...and I just sharpened it :D.





Reviewer: lil6ter Signedstarstarstarstarstar
Date: June 22, 2009
Chapter number: 9
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Meimu

*Locates pitch fork* :D. What were you saying about forgetting about this site? Great chapter, as expected. Now then...where's the next one? *Gasp* you mean you already have it done? *Puts down pitch fork* This time...your bootay will be saved...





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: June 22, 2009
Chapter number: 10
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: More Questions

"He was wearing a red kimono that Kagome recognized as Inuyasha's fire rat outfit."

 

 

...that is just down right depressing to me. Just another part of him that is ‘gone with the wind'.

 

Kagome desperately wanted answers, but it seemed that it would be quite some time before she got them. Strangely, not knowing made her afraid...and she feared that when the answers finally came, she'd wish she had never asked the questions.

 

 

Exhalent ending line. Really makes you wonder...and I'm wondering where he is going. Kikyo perhaps? Whatever happened to her? Then again, Kikyo would be too obvious wouldn't it? Hn....





Reviewer: lil6ter Signedstarstarstarstarstar
Date: May 30, 2009
Chapter number: 8
Title: Chapter 8: All The Difference

"Nor do I love you, either," he finished.

 

Um...ouch? At least he is letting her stay...but really? What was the point of the walk then? Men. I tell ya...they really think things through.





Reviewer: lil6ter Signed
Date: May 30, 2009
Chapter number: 5
Title: Chapter 5: The Proposal

A graphic designer huh? Not a career that I would have pictured him taking a part of. Still though, props for thinking outside of the box. Your italics are a little funky, but nothing too bad. I would still fix it though when you find time to edit ;-). By the way...you are even more evil for making Inuyasha see this. You do know this, right?  





Reviewer: lil6ter Signedstarstarstarstarstar
Date: May 30, 2009
Chapter number: 7
Title: Chapter 7: A New Day

Kagome stood up, too. "What happened to you?" she asked. "What happened that day in the woods?"


"I grew up," was Inuyasha's reply. Without another word to her, he left the cave. Slightly dumbstruck, Kagome followed along after him.

 

 

I love that part...that is all I can really say (besides for sending you more edits :-P) 





Reviewer: lil6ter Signedstarstarstarstarstar
Date: May 30, 2009
Chapter number: 3
Title: Chapter 3: Good-Bye

...I think I failed when it came to the enters...but at least it's up now, right? :-P. You would end it on a "cliffy" too...meanie.