Reviewer: Damara Signed
February 04, 2015
Chapter 1: Rebirth
Coming a bit late to the party, but I've spent more than a week reading this when I should have been working, so the least I can do is comment.
Things I liked:
-The way you handled Kagome's transition to hanyou. It seems realistic and in character.
-Your villains could have been lifted from the canon series; they fit in seamlessly and didn't come off as Mary Sueish as so many fanfic OCs do.
-The details of characterization. I find that the more IC a fanfic holds, the more I forgive other faults.
Things I loved:
-The Demon!Inuyasha mating scene in chapter 29. There are some pretty grody and violent depictions out there on the net of what happens were he to lose control, and I think you nailed the dynamic - that he would never actually hurt her, that it wasn't so much non-consensual as it was inevitable (If she hadn't been willing, she would have purified him), and his guilt afterward.
-When Souta tells his mom she's creepy, and she agrees; very Stepford. It made me laugh.
All in all, very well done and worth the read.
I'm glad you liked it. That chapter 29 was a fun one to write, though I always did wonder if I overdid the lemonade. So I'm grateful that you mentioned it. Your take was exactly what I was going for.