Reviewer: Dusk Signed
January 15, 2011
Chapter 2: Sizzling sweetheart
Well, you certainly have been busy lately. All these new stories. And being a person that really likes getting feedback and seeing that you had no reviews I felt that someone should respond to your work.
First off, I think this story line is pretty great. The asylum, the different stories, and the way you twist reality and fantasy are really good. I would like a bit more detail to flesh out the surroundings but the emotion- the confusion and the determined need to escape- are well written. I'm also looking forward to the characters becoming more in-depth but I assume that will develope as the story progresses.
I can't wait to seeing how this turns out. As a side note I also enjoyed the beginning of your other story- Disenchanted, I think. With all these new stories it looks like you'll be busy. Keep up the good work. :) Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the feedback :)
I'm glad you are enjoying the story. I'll make the surroundings more detailed. The characters will be developing with the story, I promise that. I'm also glad you like Disenchanted.