Reviewer: Inu Hanyou Nikkie Signed
March 28, 2008
Chapter 6: Chapter Six
I am wondering about the awful smells those hanyou and youkai must endure from the unwashed bodies, rotting drinks/foods and whatnots in those taverns! *shudders*
Preoccupied and unable to scent.. >.> I'm so evil!! Poor wench. She should have known this would happen with the bi-polar pup. Probably ticked off at not snagging a handful of coin from InuYasha... (I do wonder has InuYasha ever been with a woman and had feelings of love?)
Very nice way you got Kouga introduced into the scene and Kagome! Very smooth indeed! I was right!! Kagome is going to use Kouga to gain her freedom!! And here goes Bi-Polar.. the stewing and simmering has started! Kagome can give as good as she gets!! Poor Inu.. maybe..
Oh yep. There they go! Fighting like dogs! It was a good jab at InuYasha for Kouga to point out he should go find the wench since he made that obvious he wanted her and Kagome has made it known she doesn't want him.
Poor Kagome goes from the fryer into the fire! Now she's in trouble... and yep... there goes another dress! Dang this girl is going to be black and blue and swollen permanmently!
Might need a bit more here: "He lifted her head up warily and began licking the back of her head where the ugly gash was." it sounds like he is just licking away at her hair... maybe something to the effect of keeping her hair out of the way as he tended her. and how did he see the gash when it is covered up by all her hair... the only thing he would be able to see is the soaked matted area from the blood.
For Inu's demon markings are you taking poetic license with them? I'm just curious cause I like him having stripes going down from his eyes area.
Giggle.. we had another Star Trek moment going from Inu upon the ground covering up Kagome's chest to re-entering the Inn.
I am cringing over the use of Sango's room and bed for putting Kagome down... after all there is alot of body fluids on the sheets and the very heavy scent of sweat and sex in the air. Unless Sango has another room -like a spare bedroom of sorts. Yes, it is great she wanted to tend to Kagome just feels awkward and ..'off' somehow to put a wounded person upon an unclean bed.. or maybe is just me and the First Aid training I'd gone through.
I do like that Kouga was quick to cover up for his friend and dispose of the bodies in a effective manner. I also like that he respects InuYasha!
Poor InuYasha he is having a guilt trip now. I wonder how and if he is going to make it up to Kagome. It was sweet that he took off her shackles like he did. He still hasn't noticed the wounds on her wrists, they are probably worse or bleeding from her struggle to escape.
Another awkward bit is that Inu put Kag's head into his lap. Making her nose if she is facing up reach his navel area... how can she be crying then into his chest? Sorry to point out all these problems..
I also liked Kouga's respectful manner and speech when he went upstairs to check on Kagome when she screamed. He too missed the wounds on her wrists... But with her being attacked and head wound I think I can understand that.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
General speed of sailing by a large schooner is about 4 seconds per metre per mile under good winds. Faster if winds stronger.
Afternoon Watch is done between 12 and 4 - done by two groups the Bow Watch and the Stern Watch.
Along Shore -means to be as close to shore as possible.
Run A-Ground - referring to burying the keel into sand, soft sea bottom or rocks.
Jiffy Reefing - when the sails are reefed in a fast 'dirty' method.
Head- I had also forgot it refers to a triangle shaped sail or top corner.
Give Away Together- command used for rowing large large boats.
I also forgot to mention that a Fanthom equals 6 feet.
Ditty Bags- a small kit sac used for storing/carrying small items or personal belongings.
A Coxswain is the sailor in command of a small vessel, ie/rowboats.
You’re too funny. Are you hunting rabbits? ‘Cause I think I have a few more chapters, that are probably filled with those nasty rodent holes. LMAO!!!
Well, since I must not have described the scents of the tavern (shame on me). I agree with you about the stench, probably smells like some garbage dump. I believe a stable would have smelt better than rotting food. I shutter too. Ewww. Maybe that is why I didn’t add it. ;) I believe that demons and half demons, are probably tolerable to the stench.
No, Inuyasha isn’t a virgin but no he’s never been in love. Sorry I didn’t put more background on him. I guess I didn’t really give it thought. However, since you’re bringing this to my attention. I certainly will when I revamp the story in the future–a tweak here and there. I’ll give you fair warnings when I do..lol.
Yes, Kouga and Inuyasha go back and are friends, in a mutual extent. You know when I wrote this I never thought of the characters being Bi-Polar, maybe moody and indecisive, but not out of control. I think it’s hilarious that you thought about it in this sense. Should I give them all medication to stop the madness. I’d hate for one of them to end up with a boot shoved up their assess.... LMAO ( I hope you caught the humor in this. I can be awfully sarcastic, but its all in good fun)! I’m certainly looking forward to what you have to say in the next chapter. ;)
Yeah, Inu and Kouga going at it. This story wouldn’t be right if that didn’t happen, I don’t care how cliche it is. It just to funny, how other authors come up with, and their one-liners are hilarious. There will be more of that to come in the story.
Yeah, another dress, and thank you for pointing out another Star Trek moment. Mind you I like the show and the movies, but I do hope nobody puts Inu and Captain T Kirk into a story, because of this, and if I do see one, I will automatically think of you and these reviews and probably fall off my chair cracking up. No, he’s not licking her hair and I will certainly add more detail into that part of the story as well. Good thing she doesn’t have lice or dandruff. No, you arn’t being a pain. I am most grateful of you pointing these things out, since, I didn’t catch them. There is still plenty more Bi-polar episodes to go through and probably some more clothes shredding moments as well, however, I let you read some more....
I like Inuyasha demon stripes going down toward his eyes as well, I probably thought that’s what I was trying to detail. However, I guess not...lol. Thanks for the compliment with the poetic justice....
Omg!!! I am so ashamed, why didn’t I think about the smell of sex and sweat and ewww laying poor Kagome down on soiled sheets. That poor woman, hasn’t she been through enough. Good thing her sense of smell isn’t as good as Inuyasha’s eh?
Nobody has noticed Kagome’s wrists, blame the author for that one...lol. I don’t claim to be Bi-Polar though, I leave that up to my characters....
Really, a ship could only cruise 4 seconds per meter per mile, under good winds. I didn’t know that, and I hope this information doesn’t hurt the upcoming chapter.
See, I know a punishment that British sailors would do to pirates, and other outlaws called Keelhauling, where they would tie a man to a rope and I believe throw him over the bow. I guess it was a catch 22 situation, ether way you were pretty much F’ked. The purpose was to leave the man under for a long amount of time, then bring him up. Sometimes, the pirate would drown, other times, the person would get cut from the barnacles that lay underneath the ship and later die of infections. Pretty gruesome punishment. So, its interesting to hear the term Run-A-Ground, and now have a perfect vison of the keel itself.
Jiffy Reefing? That one is confusing, I’ll have to Google it to see if there’s an image.
Head (we wont go there...LOL :P ) This one I do know what you’re talking about.
Give Away Together, I think I’ll have to use that one in Chapter 30, so I do some more research.
Ditty Bags- I’ve seen them in movies, or if it’s the right bags that I’m thinking of? Weren’t they usually filled with doubloons and were like velvet and had a string tie to close them? Another Google search...
A Coxswain I’ve heard of, but I think there was another term for them as well, that I used. I’m not sure, I will have to re check a chapter. If its not, then I’ll put coxswain in its place.
I am anticipating what your going to say in your next review.