Reviewer: littlekitsune1 Signed
September 02, 2010
Chapter 56: Our Future
Sorry to double post, but I felt like I could explain some of my feelings clearer. By "too soon" I meant after losing their first baby. I've gone through countless grief and loss stages in my life, and even with dramatic events and loved ones escalating my recovery (like Inuyasha and Kagome have had) it always takes much longer than they've had for me to get over it enough that I can move on. So this is speaking from my own life experience, which I obviously can't claim everyone goes through the same, as a reader that's how it felt to me. Even if they're 100% commited to each other, I felt it would take more time to be able to take that final step again.
I also understand that they weren't thinking on logic. However, I'm the type of person who feels that if the logic of a situation is the only course of action that will result in a good ending, you tamp down the emotion. So it bothered me personally, because it wasn't even a choice in my opinion. Our emotions very often lead us astray. As another extreme example, it could "feel right" to sleep with someone else while you're in a relationship, but that doesn't mean you do it. Your emotions are likely influenced by something else and you need to take the logical path. But in any case, that is of course my opinion. It just seems like they're risking a little life needlessly.
As for stronger enemies, I don't think they can rule out the fact that there aren't. If one that has their strength or close to it gets hold of a shard, they're in major trouble. Again, it just feels like they're risking a new baby's life needlessly when they could just wait until the quest is over.
I do trust you to have this all planned out, of course. But I know that if my readers were unhappy with something, I'd want to know, and why. =) This is the first thing/chapter of yours I haven't been satisfied with, so it is no way meant to be an insult against you. Author's Response:
I know it isn't, and I do appreciate the feedback. If all the reviews were positive then I'd either have written the perfect story (which I know isn't the case) or I'd know some people were hiding their true thoughts. And I don't want that, as long as the criticism is constructive.
I believe it's been 3-5 months since they lost the first baby; I don't keep strict track of time. It's difficult to relate them to any contemporary person because their situation is unique. I can't speak for you, but maybe they'd get over it faster because they're young? At such a young age, they are really in love with someone, and how many of us can say that? The readers' life experiences is something I can't control; all I can do is write what makes sense to me in the context of the Inuyasha storyline. And I wouldn't say they're "over it" completely, but they're over it enough to move on with their lives.
If you know that logic is the only way you get a good ending, then of course you tamp down the emotion. But that's not the case here. Yes, it's a risk, but so is getting pregnant when the mission is over. Getting pregnant at all is a risk! Granted, it's a smaller risk, but there are no guarantees in life, either good or bad. To put it another way, they made a calculated gamble, taking slightly worse odds for the chance to have a child sooner. That's a very dry way of putting it, but I think it's a valid analogy.
Your cheating example misconstrues the phrase "feel right" as I used it. That seems to indicate it felt physically right, or seemed like a good idea at the time. It doesn't indicate a deep personal truth, as I used it. Maybe you do sleep with someone else if the relationship you're in is going downhill fast. Maybe a personal revelation tells you that the person you're dating isn't the one you were destined to be with. How often does something like this happen in movies? I find it hard to believe it doesn't happen in real life. And as I said before, this type of "feeling right" doesn't just depend on emotion. It's far deeper than that, at the level of the soul or even Kagome's miko powers.
They can't rule out the possibility of stronger enemies, but they can assume that there are very few youkai out there that would give them a hard time under normal circumstances. It may not seem that way in this story, but that's because I only write about the parts with tough youkai or situations. The standard find a youkai and kill it scenario is pretty boring. So it doesn't happen all that often, only a handful or two of times since the beginning of the story. All that's just part of the risk I outlined earlier. In fact, that's the entire substance of the risk.
Again, I don't mind the criticism. It always causes me to rethink myself, and sometimes I go back and change things around. But this element of the story is too important to the plot, and if you're the only one who has a problem with it, then I won't make any changes. It would be impossible for me to retract myself at this point anyway! I hope you can at least see my point of view and can look past this and continue to read the story.