Reviewer: InitialA Signed
May 08, 2008
Chapter 1: Their Attacker and Savior
I just read this from beginning to end (well, not all at once, it's very long! X3) on MM.org, but I know that I appreciate getting reviews on other websites as well as the primary website, so here goes:
THIS IS FANTASTIC. I was engrossed from beginning to end. Yes, some squeemish parts of me weren't into the M/M/F, but I never have been a Sess/Kag kind of girl. I thought some of the characterization was off, but I did realize after a time that characters don't always remain stoic, and evolve over time, just as they did here. I loved the carnival at the beginning, with the stuffed toys, it was probably one of my favorite parts, other than InuYasha being so caring with Kagome later on during the story.
I also wanted to commend you for the excellent characterization of Eri. I can never really keep them all straight, but usually just put Kagome's friends as a collective evil who have a mob-mentality, but I really, really enjoyed reading someone who singled a girl out, gave her such a complex personality, and turned her loose into a world she didn't understand and paid for it dearly. I haven't felt such anger at a story character since Professor Umbridge in the fifth Harry Potter book.
So, after sucha long review, once more: FANTASTIC WORK. If I could put you up for another nomination, I would, this has been a real pleasure to read. Happy writings! Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your kind words! I have to admit, I'm not real big on Sess/Kag either unless there's a really good reason for it - and it almost never involves love on their part, and always involves InuYasha being around as well. I could never write a straight Sess/Kag fic - if they were in character and around each other very much, they'd probably kill each other.
Even in the manga, the characters have grown a lot, and it turns out that not even a full year has passed yet (we haven't made it to Kagome's 16th birthday). It doesn't seem fair to keep them static - they all deserve to grow. I'm so glad you enjoyed the carnival. It was a lot of fun coming up with the idea for the prizes. I wanted to do something different from the rest of the fics with similar scenes out there (it seems to be a popular choice for a date between the two), and I hope I succeeded.
Of her three friends, Eri always seemed to be the most pushy. the others coudl be as well, but it seemed to be her that always led the pack. I have to admit when I started, I didn't really intend to give her so much time, but she just perfectly into the plot. And I have to agree - I didn't care for Professor Umbridge, either. I was cheering as she was chased out the door.
Thanks again! I'm bad about leaving reviews, though I've been trying to get better when I have a chance to read. I think it was your "A Matter of Trust" that I read and enjoyed. The next time I got on a ready spree, I'll have to see what else you have posted.