Date: December 01, 2008 8:39 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chapter 1
I am sorry if you take this the wrong way but I think you need to write more. I know how hard it is to write someting but this I felt was too short. Your end notes was longer then the meat of the story and even the disclamer is almost the same size.
Again I am sorry if you take this the wrong way but I did feel you deserved a coment since you did take the time to write it and post it for others to see. I hope next one you post will be longer.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. I am thrilled that you took the time to read what I had written and to let me know what you thought. I was trying for a Haiku poem, but it has been an extremely long time since I have had to write anything. I am in no way offended, it makes me want to try harder for the next one. Thanks!! :)