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Reviewer: sacredjewl Signed [Report This]
Date: March 24, 2011 12:06 am
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chapter 1

aww! so sad :(





Reviewer: Vampire Liaison Signed [Report This]
Date: April 15, 2009 7:10 am
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chapter 1

You have problems with the tenses. It starts present tense, than switches randomly to past tense and back.





Reviewer: JeevaraniRoyal Signedstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 16, 2009 1:11 am
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chapter 1

I like the way this ended. I think it's fairly realistic to something that would happen in the real world. Even if they are a perfect couple, even if they love each other, even if they aren't and don't, it's unlikely they'd end up together. I can't say I like happy endings that much. Anybody can write a happy ending, but only a true artist can write a heart-wrenching ending like this.





Reviewer: mortimer Signed [Report This]
Date: October 25, 2008 4:09 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chapter 1

Kagome started it!  Thanks to you, I was there.  I can prove it.  It was ALL her fault!

 

I have a secret:  I want to see InuYasha give that brat a good ol' fashioned spanking.  She needs one.

 Poor InuYasha, Kagome can be so mean.





Reviewer: Lunamoon Signed [Report This]
Date: October 13, 2008 4:27 am
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chapter 1

That was sad....He's a jerk and I want to punch him...but at the sametime i wish she would hug him and forget...at lest a little bit.





Reviewer: Deathmvp Signed [Report This]
Date: October 02, 2008 4:39 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chapter 1

I like this as a start to something bigger.  Call me a softy if you will but I do not see it ending like that especaly the last few lines.  This trouble may just be what they need to push them togther.



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