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Reviewer: trust_desperation Signedstarstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 28, 2007 2:13 am
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chappy One

I love your story it's so amazing. I wish I could write like that. Well great job





Reviewer: vampire liaison Signedstarstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 29, 2007 7:38 am
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chappy One

you tense jump. by that i mean one moment it'll be "he looks at his mother," present tense, and then it'll be "he looked at his mother" past tense. either is fine, but you really need to pick one. things that jump around are a major pet peeve and sound immature, as though you dont know what your doing. good luck with the rest of it.





Reviewer: Keriina Signedstarstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 12:37 am
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chappy One

wow..... amazing





Reviewer: Ro0tin4Kagome Signedstarstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 20, 2007 3:55 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chappy One

That left u in a bad position.
When i used to write [ stupid fight] i had an alternate chapter. Took a lot of work. =]
ne ways im likinit so far. But im slightly confused . Did his mama leave him .. or was she just lik.. ikno u gonna go through a hard life.
idk -> let me kno ,k?
Cant wait 4 next chapter
r4k
=]





Reviewer: trinity757575 Signedstarstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 18, 2007 9:51 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chappy One

What a touching and remarkably heart felt beginning to the first half of the story. And as you read and see this sweet little boy go from laughter to hurt bewilderment, it draws you in and you can't help but to feel the need to comfort. This story truely is interesting to see what it will develop into. Can't wait to read the next chapter, 'tel then I'll be reading y'ah, trinity

Author's Response: thanks so much!



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