Date: January 25, 2007 11:21 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chapter 1
hmm. i sense a 'naraku's still alive' coming here. i may be off on that thought though. it could make for a great plot however. you have a well deveolped beginning. i feel bad for Kagome, but i'm sure that InuYasha is doing this for some reason (beyond his normal annoying controlling self). well done with the characters, i love how you summerized the events that have lead up to your story.
my only advice is to watch your tenses. a couple times i noticed a switch from past tense to present tense within a paragraph. It doens't take away from the plot though, so that's good!
your story is awesome, i can't wait to read more!