Date: April 18, 2008 11:29 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chapter 1
The poem, in itself is good, but it really is kinda hard to read.
Try editing, and space things out. You've got several paragraphs that you can work with, here, by seperating them into selected places.
Practice makes perfect, my friend. You'll see.
Um yeah. I know what you mean-it's not supposed to be that way at all. I don't really know what happened between me submitting it and typing it in, but somehow it got all mashed together. Sorry about that. I've editted it again now, so hopefully this time my formatting will be accepted...hopefully....this site and my computer don't really seem to get along all that well. If you care, check out my ffnet account instead (same penname) because the formatting's right there.