Reviews For A Gathered Storm
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Reviewer: la623 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 24, 2008 10:17 pm
Chapter number: 8
Title: The Chasm of Faith

Just read this and i love it! can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: chanda Signedstarstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06, 2008 9:01 am
Chapter number: 7
Title: Chapter 7: Illumination in Unnatural Light

This story, has been really good. I am certainly looking forward to chapter eight.


Reviewer: JediK1 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 20, 2008 6:22 pm
Chapter number: 2
Title: The Swaggering Desparado

Ah, nevermind my last review, then!  :)  Great chapter, and I love the rose between scenes!

Reviewer: JediK1 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 20, 2008 6:19 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: Unfold Me

Good start so far.  The format is a little hard to read, though.  I'm not sure if you're new to fanfics or not, so please don't take this as an insult if you already know this!

I know when you are writing a book, you must use proper indentation.  In fanfics, though, you usually won't see any indentations. We start at the beginning of the line, like I have so far in my review.  Also, make sure you italicize character's thoughts.  It helps the reader see the difference between the story itself and when the character is lost in thought.  One last tidbit...when you switch scenes, like when the scene switched from Kagome to Miroku, you should break that apart somehow.  You could use a line break, or just *** between the end of the previous scene and the start of the next.  

This story has a lot of potential, and I can't wait to keep reading the rest!

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