Date: January 14, 2008 6:42 am
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chapter 1
Not bad, little one, not bad at all. I liked the ending, although I think you cut it kinda short.
All in all, the plot was nicely thought up.
Author's Response: Thank you. If you think it's worth adding to, then I will think it over and see what I can come up with. =)