Date: August 20, 2007 10:16 pm
Chapter number: 1
wow, you have creepy moments, huh. i like it, though i find the sometimes there sometimes not rhyme scheme hard to follow, i love the last verse from 'look into those eyes' especially.
Author's Response: This poem in its first incarnation started out as free verse...it's got choppy scansion...the rhythm pattern is not smooth and flowing...that may be the jarring you're feeling.