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Reviewer: Lizzy529 Signedstarstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 02, 2016 6:42 am
Chapter number: 1
Title: It Happened One Night

Omg!!! Poor Shippo!!!





Reviewer: chelseatygers Signedstarstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 30, 2015 12:47 am
Chapter number: 1
Title: It Happened One Night

Haha, this was so cute! A few errors, but it's forgiveable since I'm assuming English isn't your native language and you write better than most native speakers anyway.

This might be because I've been awake for two days, but did you write "the cervix of her mouth"? That sounds uncomfortable and makes me want to gargle salt. I'd go back to check if that's correct but my eyes are tired.

I loved the beginning with Inuyasha screwing around with Buyo in the dead of night (before he got around to screwing with Kagome, ha). It was such a nice visual. The sexy stuff was superb and I might read this again once I've actually slept. Thanks for sharing!!! =D



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review. You are right about the cervix thing. I think I got the wrong word there, but since I don't know what word is right, I altered the sentence. Thanks for reporting.

 

English is indeed not my native language. I hope the errors are minor.  





Reviewer: Rochoa Signed [Report This]
Date: March 29, 2015 11:35 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: It Happened One Night

I loved this! Inuyasha and Kagome's interactions felt very genuine and I thought the lemon was really well-written and realistic! I especially loved that things end up going back to normal for the most part in the gang haha. And LOL poor Shippo's gonna be in big trouble for his imitation of Sesshoumaru! Haha anyway, great job on this!

Author's Response: Thank you for the nice review. Glad you liked it :)



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