Date: May 28, 2014 12:59 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: Chapter 1
This was incredible. You have a gift for erotic fiction, and I am reaping the benefits of such cleverly woven words. All I can think is how brilliant this was. I love that InuYasha tried to hold himself back all the while Kagome was sneaking around with this hypnotized self. It was hysterical, especially because no one ended up feeling upset by it. I died immediately when InuYasha chose the word pink because I got a feeling it would somehow slip out of his mouth in a passionate embrace. It was so much better than I imagined though! Part of me wants to have a glimpse of Kagome's POV from the time of the hypnosis up till the big reveal, but I am so pleased with how it ended that I can't bring myself to beg for a sequel! Absolutely fantastic!! I loved it! Can't wait to see more from you. Thank you for sharing!
Author's Response: Wow, thank you for all your praise! =D Your views were insightful and wonderful and make me see my own work in a different way. Thanks so much!!!