Date: August 03, 2007 6:46 am
Chapter number: 3
Title: What to do about Shippo
I didnt like this chapter all that much. it kind of felt drwan out and a bit like filler, unessecary. also, there is way too much inner dialouge. i dont need to hear their everythought like that, and you dont differentiate thought and speach enough. its confusing. also, ovefr doing the inner debate can be a bit taxing to read all the time.
Date: June 29, 2007 8:00 am
Chapter number: 1
I like it.
Kagome made a bitchy move saying that. How stupid can you be..even in the heat of and arguement.. I would never.
But kagz is kinda whiney is hse always lik that and we never noticed? lol