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Reviewer: fletcher91 Signedstarstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 13, 2012 11:58 pm
Chapter number: 5
Title: Chapter 3 part 2

Please update soon!!!!!!

Reviewer: ShouraiChan Signed [Report This]
Date: March 23, 2011 1:38 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: prologue

I definitely like it, but I wouldn't put so much information out there at first. Like, explaining their ages, where it's located and everything...A story should be fluid. If Sango is nineteen and a spy, tell us, but tell is in the actual story, you know? And punctuation---you need a few " " here and there, as well as something to help the story flow more naturally. Don't rely on dialogue so much, either. :) Other than that, I'm sure it'll be great and I look forward to reading it.

Reviewer: DarkNeko Signedstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 16, 2011 6:24 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: prologue

Really good, but you just need to cap names...
InuYasha Taisho
And when someone speaks, you put "" around it...
"Hello, my nam is InuYasha Taisho, and I______,"
Do that, and it'll be perfect! If you would like me to edit, I can =)

Author's Response: thanks I'll be sure to do that from now on and I might take you up on that offer

Reviewer: CandIcane Signed [Report This]
Date: February 16, 2011 10:18 am
Chapter number: 1
Title: prologue

Quite good just a couple minor things to touch up and it will be perfect :) I totally understand what you mean though about the reviews I just added my frist story on here and 30 some people have read it and so far no reviews so I'm kinda wondering it its any good?! But in the case of your story I will be patiently waiting for your next chapter. Happy writting! CandIcane

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