Date: September 17, 2010 5:00 pm
Chapter number: 11
Title: Chapter 11 Goodnight My Love
It seems a little weird at times that they've only known each other for apprx a day considering how they are. Another great chapter, having Yash's two sides fighting over what to do was great. Thank you for he era clarification, it was very helpful. I can't wait for the next chapter, keep up the good work.
Yeah I didn't want them to fight so I didn't make them likethey are in the actual show. But my idea was kind of like the whole romeo and juliet theme, where it's like love at first sight.
Date: September 13, 2010 4:22 am
Chapter number: 10
Title: Chapter 10 The Present
Awwww adorable, I love this story and you portray everyone's emotions extremely well. My only issue is (and I apologize if I already stated this) that if the story is supposed to take place in a feudal era-like time then there wouldn't be school with proms and such, and if it's supposed to take place in a more modern era then it doesn't make a lot of sense for Kags to be traveling by foot and sleeping out in the open. Another great chapter though and I can't wait for the next one.
Author's Response: i've had a couple of people ask about this and i never really made it clear in what time period it took place in, but actually what i pictured when i started writing this story was that it took place inbetween the modern and feudal eras. I probly shouldn't have called it a "prom" cuz i think it confuses people, but anyways, thank you so much for reading and giving me your opinion! i really appriciate it!