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Reviewer: JakkaruKitsune Signed [Report This]
Date: December 28, 2010 12:55 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: Ch.1 Moving in

This is cute...so far.
I can not wait for the next chapter.





Reviewer: ShouraiChan Signedstarstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2010 5:08 am
Chapter number: 3
Title: Chapter 3 Meeting friends

OH CHRIST!!!! This makes me so happy! I'm a HUGE fan of the Harvest Moon series, and I swear, just reading this makes me gush big time. It reminds me of the time I first played Harvest Moon on the Gamecube--"Another Wonderful Life", which was the girl version. Oh, I went insane with it. Hands down, it is 100% my favorite RPG for any system! (They could have had better bachelors...) BUT LO AND BEHOLD! My prayers were answered when they released Harvest Moon on the Wii. I must have had a stroke in Gamestop on the spot because I didn't even KNOW about it! It was "Tree Of Tranquility" and I remember blowing money on a Wii AND the game, and the manual, lol! I was so happy! And LUKE!!!! WHOOOOOOO! MY FAVORITE BACHELOR!!!! He's just so damn adorable and so full of life! I was happy to meet all of the other bachelors too! I love them! And then, when the next game came out "Harvest Moon: Animal Parade", I was like, "Boo, same bachelors, sorta same gameplay, but...OH WAIT! NEW BACHELORS!" Including the Harvest King and this really hot guy called the "Wizard". I won't give away his REAL name, because I'm not a huge spoiler fan, but dear God, I seriously fell in love. I felt like I was betraying Luke in the first game. *Tear* He'll always be my love!! Oh...wow. Did I really just gush like that? Super embarrassed. My bad. Ahem! Anyway! I really cannot wait to see your update! I love this so much, and seriously commend you on starting a Harvest Moon/Inuyasha AU! Loves it! Much love, your fellow Harvest Moon fan,

~Sho-chan~



Author's Response:
 
OH CHRIST!!!! You make me so happy! I thought I was the only HM fan here!~^_^~ I remember my first HM game, we found AWL at BB and my mom and I spent the entire spring break playing it. We wore up all night and slept all day. Best summer of my life. If you go to Fogu.com/hm you can get all the updates on HM. The games that are coming, walkthroughs, ext. (in HMWii I likes the Doc best>.>Though Gale will always be my fav, He reminds me of Howl from Howl's Moving Castle) So I will assume it all makes sense? Some people are a little confused. I will tell you though, my next ch should be here within the month.
Have you played FOMT? A lot of my story takes place in HM:DS which is a cross of AWL/FOMT (more or less) If something seems off, let me know^_^ The only thing I'm having a prob with is how to get Inu to Kagome's farm for her black heart event.X/ Got any ideas?





Reviewer: Thayet Signed [Report This]
Date: April 29, 2010 5:01 am
Chapter number: 2
Title: Chapter 2 settling in

I never did tell you that I really like your work and love the way this story is turning out.

P.S. Thanks for the shout-out, I'm truly touched.





Reviewer: InuGrrrl Signedstarstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 06, 2010 11:35 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: Ch.1 Moving in

Welcome to Eternal Destiny. ^_^

Very cute start (Yasha's such an adorable grump!), and since the awesome Selina MacCloveror has already said all there is to be said con-crit wise, I'll just add this: Continue writing and finding your voice. Advice from a good beta will help, but only you can weave the tale, so have fun with it and don't take it too seriously. This is fan-fiction, after all, not the tryouts for a Pulitzer. 0.~

Cheers!





Reviewer: Selina MacCloveror Signed [Report This]
Date: March 05, 2010 1:05 am
Chapter number: 1
Title: Ch.1 Moving in

For your first fanfic, this isn't a bad start.  I was confused in a few places, but I don't know anything about the game, so that might be why.  When you're writing, try to look at it from the point of view of someone who knows nothing about the game, and that might help you in that regard.  As a general rule, if you have to explain something in the author's notes, then it should probably be detailed in the body of the chapter instead.  Of course, I'm a huge violator in that area, so take that for what you will.  LOL

You're right, though - you need a beta, mainly just for commonly confused word errors, but if you're interested, there are some who can help you with your flow and organization, too.   I know someone who was recently looking for beta work, as a matter of fact.  If you want, I can send you their e-mail address.  

Your story has potential, and it definitely sounds interesting - the plot isn't like anything I've read before.  Very cute.  ^_^  Good luck!



Author's Response:

Thank you SO much for your review! I'd love to know where your confused at so I can fix it, and any other things that need fixing. One thing I'm always worried about is becoming redundant. I tend to take out what I deem obvious and I guess I need to go back and add a few details that I took out. Though some things like why I put what chara. where wouldn't really work and that's a big problem I have. I have 2 2/3 chapt.s done and I'd love to have the others fixed before I post them.

And I'd love their address! I don't like embarrassing my self with stupid mistakes that could have been avoided.>_<

 I'm glad you like it, I was worried that since no one who would like Inuyasha would like harvest Moon so therefore, it would be too weird or simple and no one would give it a 2nt look. Thank you for reading and taking the time help me!~^_^~



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