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Reviewer: fireandicepixie Signed [Report This]
Date: April 17, 2009 9:36 pm
Chapter number: 8
Title: A day at school

are you sure you're finished with this story because it doesnt sound like you are. if you aren't, please hurry and update it. i would lik to read the rest of it. thank you





Reviewer: akdreamer Anonymousstarstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 19, 2007 10:08 pm
Chapter number: 8
Title: A day at school

started reading this wonderful story last night and now I'm looking forward to the next chapter. 





Reviewer: vikikibouki Anonymousstarstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: August 17, 2007 5:59 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: Kagome's Feelings

This is such a beautiful story. I comletely fell in love with it.

The only thing that I can find fault with are the spelling errors. There really are too many of them. Please try being a bit more careful. Either than that, I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.

Luv ya & leave ya, sweetie. JA NE.





Reviewer: Inu Hanyou Nikkie Signedstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 18, 2007 5:20 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: Kagome's Feelings

Pretty good.. just go back and correct the bad spelling/grammar mistakes. It really substracts from the overall pleasure of the story. Maybe get yourself a Beta if you can. Or even a dictionary can help out. (I have 6 by my computer) and also try reading the story outloud to yourself so you can hear the spots that are off.

examples: jewel was hole,-you are saying the jewel is a hole in the ground/wall/floor..etc.. You meant write "whole" meaning it is complete, in its entirity.

they frequency of how often they were coming across- they change to "the" and were coming change to "came".

But hers, hers had been made long ago - that is an awkward sentence.

and filled her should with: did you mean "soul" or something else.

There are many others. I'll be glad to review it again after you make the corrections.

Author's Response: I wrote this like so many years ago. lol. I am just trying to get them posted I will work on the typos.



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