Date: July 18, 2009 4:23 pm
Chapter number: 1
Title: Escaping to the West
I like it very much! I hope you decide to continue the story. A couple small critiques: Inuyasha is rather OOC (though I suppose you could excuse that as having a more pleasant upbringing). Also, you have a couple near-malapropisms; for instance "luscious palace" was probably meant to be "luxurious palace." Otherwise your writing style is pleasant, engaging, and well paced. Hope this helps!
Thanks for that, but I'm not a really grammer type person so... yeah. But the OOC Inuyasha I'm still trying to keep some of his traits in tact, but it has to go with the story for later.